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Cyclops AR by dukeleto Cyclops AR by dukeleto
Vector drawing traced over PMG

6.8mm bullpup assault rifle.
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Over all design is impressive. Is a resonable & plassasable design that shows no flaws excluding the exposed gas line if thats is it.
Is bullpup configuration So it will be ideal for greater ranges then standard weapons.
But evidence that it was derived from PMG are very strong.
Adding your own elements would make the weapon stand out and seperate itself from being associated with PMG in any way.
Example- Editing the grip to give it a diffrent apperence or Giving areas like the handguard on stock Unique groves.

1]- First subject Id like to comment on, is the Clear mag.
Unless you actually have a mag on you or have done reserch on them,Most people have no clue to how they work Despite them being very simple.
Here the bullets go all the way to the very end of the mag which is incorrect. But its a common mistake.
Mags work by having a spring device inside push ammunition upwords to the top.
So a fraction of the end of the mag is for the spring to rest as its compressed when loaded.
2]- Secound subject is the ammunition caliber listed and what appers in the mag. Once again basic reserch on the round would prove helpful.
6.8mm rounds are larger then 5.56 & simular to 7.62 rounds in size.
What appers here is about the size of a 5.56round, only with an elongated shell. Appers to be around the demensions of 5.45X50mm or so. Which would still be a devistating round in diffrent manner.
A rectangular Slighty longer mag would fix all this.

3]- Now to the design
A- Right away I see the gap on the grip which is seen in all PMG submissions using that grip. But Iv seen no actual firearms with that.
A quick google serch on the HK weapons would have fixed that. Im thinking that detail there was picked up from an airsoft toy that PMG creators used as a reference.

B- Is the design. its somewhat conflicting design of the front top & back bottom.
Back is slick and simple ,as the front is over engineered & complex.
Barrels,pipes and parts apper to just go wild in all directions. There appers to be 2 possable gas chanbers ,the top vanishing from sight as it goes by the cooling vents on the top guard & the bottom almost rideing on the side of the weapon Which would make it vulnerble to busting when thaking physical abuse.Ect

Overall nice work, Improvements can be made here and there though.
Being as it is If the weapon was put to use It be a great ranged weapon the size on most compact weapons.
A modifacation to cover that gas line and its be a fine weapon on the feild.
RATEING
4 on Vision- Excluding PMG work ,It takes a lot of effort to produce an image to this level
2 on Origiality- Nothing that stands out, In all respect, I can see ever part used from PMG weapons, No noticable custom modifications were made to distiguish looks.
3 on technique - Im sure it was overlayed on the original image Which was generated on PMG ,Though I greatly repect you being the first to correctly use PMG as it was intended to be used for.
2 on Impact. Iv been around the block on designs. This is on a more common side Only standing out a bit more as its in bullpup configuration.
PMG time & time again have shown only several types of basic designs. None haveing unique features that stand out well.
This one here resembles far to many that have come befor it.

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Fortelegy Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Professional Interface Designer
Bullpup rifles are so sick, haha.
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B-o-S Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome! :D
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B-o-S Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
woah.... awesome!!
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dukeleto Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks.
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ArturiusMaxwell Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
There are great design ideas, as Souzousha pointed out there are a number of visual and minor design faults but the concept is great, I like the RIS sections on the front but think that the carry handle might be mute, for something like that using a shoulder strap to haul the rifle round might be better given its size, also as it is potentialy a high accuracy rifle fitting a scope would potentially be more useful.
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dukeleto Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
there were actually quite a few versions of it, including a DMR [link]
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Mc-Squiggle Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010  Student Filmographer
awesome dude! :D
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billybob70 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Professional General Artist
Nice color, good use of shading and highlighting.
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Blackhawk2955 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this thing is sexy
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SkipperLee Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Awesome - definitely one of my faves :D
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Souzousha Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow this first time Iv seen anyone use PMG correctly.
To develope there idea to finalize on there own .
Il go ahead and Critique it after I finishe my mail XC
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dukeleto Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
the flaw with that argument is that the PMG version is BETTER.
Maybe I'll improve at vectors, and that will no longer be the case, but I bet PMG will remain a useful tool for developing ideas, whatever you think of it :p
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Souzousha Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Na PMG is not better once you know whos using it.
To any unknowing person Yeah PMG is more appeling But thats cuz Dr Noob did his job well.

Best way to improve is throw in some new elements into the design when you go from PMG to your drawing.

Id agree it is a usefull tool but no one uses it correctly as intended
Is like a Golden Spoon being used to dig small holes for planting seeds.
LOL

Well Il start on the critique, Dont take nothing personal All constructive to improve
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dukeleto Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
the PMG version of the Cyclops is a better image, it's clearer, more cohesive and illustrates the function and the concept well.

[link]

As I say, when I improve at vectors that may change, but PMG will still be faster, and produce a quality result. Who is using it is irrelevant, how they make it is irrelevant, it's the design, and how well you express it that's important.
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SkipperLee Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010  Student Digital Artist
The best thing would be your imagination,
and your vector illustration software.

PMG, in your case, served as a reference.

With your imagination fuelling your skills,
you can do so much more with your software.
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dukeleto Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
well, I'm not so sure, and that certainly won't be true for everyone.
DA has no place restricting creative output based on the medium it's created in.
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Robbe25 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010
Looks nice m8. The area where the original ejection port was looks strange tho!
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